3.37★★★Fall Into Love by Selena Akeroyd (Naughty Nookie Simone Part 1)

I was given this R2R in exchange for my honest opinion.

This is an erotica short coming in around 60 pages.

This was an interesting little story. Girl meets boy, they have killer sex, and end the 4 year sexual drought.

The first 30 pages were a bit slow, but the sexual tension was there. You could feel it in the air. The next 25 pages was straight hot, sweaty, exhausting sex.

And then, the cliffhanger. I was just as blind sided as the female character. That came totally out of left field. I have no idea where it is going, but very curious as to how it will play out.

Now, while I really did like the idea of the story, I had a few problems.

*needs a lot of editing(typos, missing words, odd and random abbr.)

*there were quite a few words I had to look up, either from never hearing them or seeing them before or not knowing if they were typos

*some word choices were rather odd, almost like the strangest synonym available was chosen

*the language was all wrong, which made relating with the character hard at times
-setting NYC
-Mona, southern bell from GA, living in NYC
-Zane, strong southern drawl, chivalrous, ex-Marine
-Southern Bells, New Yorkers, and Americans in general do not think or speak this way. I know, everyone keeps saying Chantelle English is English, well no it's not. English in America may have the say words as English in Europe, but a lot have very different meanings. I'll give you an example. "I'm not that flush in the pocket" this makes little to no sense to Americans, and a New Yorker and/or a southern bell would never say this. The only reason I know it means "I'm not rich enough" is because the next part is "that I could take off a few days with a back injury!"
-a true southern bell/gentleman(especially since he has military background) says Ma'am all day long, it is ingrained in them. He would never just say "Are you ok?" it would be "Are you ok, Ma'am?" or if she asked "Can I buy you a drink?" his answer would be "No Ma'am, that isn't necessary." and not just "That isn't necessary." That would be considered disrespectful.

So enough of my language ranting, you get my point.

Thanks to the author for for that crazy little twist, I didn't expect that.

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